Tuesday, 1 October 2013

Investigating Energy with Energizer

Agenda

Todays Agenda:

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2 Comments & Grades

Today we started of class with our science essays. First we looked at how we did and what to change in the future. Take a look:



Essay Comments & Grades


  • Overall, on average, your essays we’re really good!
  • I was surprised by how well some of you write!
  • Your final mark is in a very big font:
    • content - A, B, C, D, F
    • writing - A, B, C, D, F
    • citing -  A, B, C, D, F
  • For the grading rubric descriptions at the bottom of your essay
    • your peer highlighted,
    • you italicized,
    • and I bolded.

Comment Acronyms
AD = Add more detail.  This is too general.
Add statistics (numbers) or specific information about your topic.
Sometimes things were too general.  For example, “there are good and bad points about everything in this world”.
I would read it, try to avoid to vomiting and then I’d strike through it.
For example, “there are good and bad points about everything in this world”.

ITC = In-text citation is needed for this sentence.
Wherever you have a specific fact such as a number, use in-text citation.

UT = Use a transition.

WFS = Write in full sentences.
Sometimes your sentences were missing verbs.
For example, “Plangement.”  
A sentence must have:
  • A subject
  • A verb,
  • End punctuation (.!?),
  • Capital letter at the beginning.  

Writing Highlights:
Strikethrough means cut it out.  It is unnecessary.
Orange means you have a grammar mistake.
Before a period, a comma, or a colon, there’s no space.
After a period, there are one or two spaces.
After a comma, a colon or a semi-colon, there’s one space.
Green means it’s a spelling mistake.

Organization
The sentences and paragraphs are very easy to follow and understand.

Voice
The voice of the essay is scientific and informative.
    • “During my research, I found out a lot about hydroelectric dams.”
    • “I am going to tell you about the amazing iphone solar charger.”

Final Science Grades
Weight
  • 50 - test
  • 20 - essay content
  • 20 - essay writing
  • 10 - essay citing
  • CWW grade - 5






Final Draft Check
  1. Self-Check (~10 minutes)
  2. Peer Assessment (~20 minutes)
  3. Make changes (~15 minutes)
  4. Self Assessment and Changes (~15 minutes)
  5. Submit Final Draft Check form (~5 minutes)

A. Self-Check (~15 minutes)
  1. Make sure you have a catchy/interesting title.
  2. Check the content for all 5 paragraphs.
    1. In the rubric, delete the descriptions for the man-made or renewable energy.
  3. Check the writing.
  4. Check that you have a complete works cited list (and in-text citation.)
    1. Alphabetize the list.
    2. Put one line of space between works.
    3. Make sure you have at least TWO in-text citations if you want an A.  Check that all the in-text citation in your essay matches your works cited list.  (Remember the first piece of information in your works cited list is what you use for in-text citation)
  5. Make sure that I’ve commented on your essay.  
  6. Make sure your essay is size 12-14 and a serifed font (Times New Roman, Georgia.  Don’t use Arial.)

B. Peer Assessment  (~25 minutes)
  1. Find a partner and give your partner editing rights for your essay.  Check the box notify via email.
  2. Go to your gmail inbox and open your partner’s essay.  Read your partner’s essay.
  3. Make at least
    1. Five constructive feedback comments
  • Comments that can make the essay better.
  • Use the words from the rubric at the bottom!
    • Content: Explain the energy changes in this paragraph for gravitational to kinetic.
    • Writing: Use thoughtful transitions to connect ideas between these paragraphs.
    • Citing works: Use in-text citation for this specific fact.

  1. One positive comment
  • Find one of the best things about their essay and comment on it!  
  • Make your partner feel good about themselves by highlighting something they did well.
  1. Peer assess your partner’s essay at the bottom of their essay.  Give your partner a mark by highlighting the description that best fits their essay for every section.  You must do this 10 times.  
  2. Then highlight the mark for content, writing and works cited.

C. Make changes to your essay based on your partner’s feedback (~15 minutes)

D. Self Assess and make final changes (~15 minutes)

  1. Self assess by italicizing the description that best fits your essay for every section.

E. Submit Final Draft Check form! (~5 minutes)




And we also learned not to write in first person when writing scientifically. Here is a link to a great website that helps us with that.

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3 Investigate Energy

Today we also looked at our science investigations. We tried some of them out in four labs of our choice with another partner.   



This picture is from measuring the distance the rubber band traveled


This picture shows the measuring of the thermometer every minute





This picture shows the the measurement of 5ml of water pumped 8 times. The number of times pumped was the constant of this experiment

This picture shows how high the ball bounced when three seconds of air was let out.


This picture shows how we monitor the amount of voltage by adding one battery and recording what the voltage is
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4 Data Charts

This is some of the data our class colected




A) Stretch Elastic /cm
Distance /cm

B)Time /min
Temperature
15
20
193
169

1
2
3
4
5
6
21
23
25
29
33
40





C) Chips Mass /g
Temperature Change /C

D) Volume of water /mL
Height /cm
0.1
11

0
5
10
15
20
0
5
85
120
150





E) Time /s
Height bounced back /cm

# batteries
Voltage /V
0
3
6
9
80
86
70
82
68

1
2
3
4
5
6
1.2
3.0
4.0
5.6
4.1
5.8

1 comment:

  1. Include some of the skills involved in collecting data.

    ReplyDelete

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